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   교정강사   Erica(C)    등록일   2021-04-18
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  It was sunny day and my husband and I walk around the mountain. It rained yesterday, and the air is clean. While we were taking a rest on the bench in the wood, I suddenly thought why I am learning English. Actually I am not deperate to learn English. Learning English is just one of my hobbies. We are planning to take a trip abroad once a year. This is a good goal for me to learn English. My husband agrees with me. After my daughter graduates from Univercity next year, we will be free from paying for her tuition. We can pay more money for our pleasures. When we finally get to luxury resort abroad, I would be glad that I am ready to communicate with them from other cultures. I believe that dream can come true. Bye
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It was a sunny day and my husband and I walked around the mountain. It rained yesterday, and the air was clean.

While we were taking a rest on the bench in the wood, I suddenly thought why I am learning English. Actually, I am not desperate to learn English. Learning English is just one of my hobbies. We are planning to take a trip abroad once a year. This is a good goal for me to learn English. My husband agrees with me. After my daughter graduates from University next year, we will be free from paying her tuition. We can pay / spend more money for our pleasures. When we finally get to a luxury resort abroad. I would be glad that I am ready to communicate with other people with different cultures.

I believe that dream can come true. Bye