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   교정강사   Arah(C)    등록일   2021-11-08
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  A. What was your favorite memory of your father? When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father. One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor. Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father. But, I did love him. I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. He changed little by little. Even if it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly. I could smell him. Also, I could feel his sweetness. Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.
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A. What was your favorite memory of your father?

When I was young, he was too busy working that I seldom had memories about my father. ​

One day, after I became an adult, I somehow felt that my father was too poor. ​

Cause we didn't have a lot of time with each other, I felt uncomfortable when I was with my father. ​

But, I did love him. ​

I wanted to show my love to him in a direct way. ​

So I tried to express it by hugging him or by contacting him without any reason. ​

He changed little by little. ​

Even if that memory isn't so great it is not that great memory, one day, when I entered his house, he hugged me tightly. 

=> Corrected : The sentence is corrected grammatically. 

I could smell him. ​

Also, I could feel his sweetness. ​

Although he passed away already, I cannot forget that feeling I had at that time.  ​​